Holy Hellfire! wow ! ok now I really will try for coherent. This is going to be one hell of a journey you paint such vivid pictures for this verse! poor Jensen he really has been through the wringer the Care Unit sounds really delightful.

The whole idea is just amazing! I look forward to finding out more but for now the whole introduction concept was brilliant. Jensen being delivered to Jeff as a posession and Jensen's thoughts through out the process gave fascinating insights to the story. The whole process was so fraught with tension and when Jeff snaped with the supervisor it really showed the nature of a Retriver and I thought the part with the eye and the finger was a great touch!

I have to say as well I was so with Jeff when he said-
"He's perfect, and you goddamn well know it."
Yeah with you all the way there! (said while hiding behind the furniture well you never know!)

I really want to see the next part of this, so please continue and I really loved Jensen's voice through this! he is so broken you just want to hug him! but preferably when Jeff is on a mission I don't have that big a death wish! So that is it I am hooked but thanks for a great story.